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Those are beautiful Mimi 
I've never been good at haikus because of the syllable restriction, but your words still have so much emotion 
if you want a topic for a poem, I would say start with an emotion that you're well acquainted with (mine is sadness 
), often the poem will almost write itself when I'm referring to an event or emotion that I feel very strongly about 
It's not bad, and they do not suck 
you gotta believe in yourself more! Seriously, your words are so poetic (for lack of a better adjective ) I love how some of the things you talk about in your poems are mentioned in such an abstract way I struggle with doing that please keep writing because you will only keep improving. I already love your style
Here's a poem I finished today don't know what to call it but that's okay I rhymed 
Your memory grows faint within my mind
I always find it hard to find the time
To think of you
But when I do
It only makes me cry.
Tried desperately to make you want to stay--
No matter what I did, you found a way
To say goodbye
And let me die
In memories I wish I'd burned.
Only a fool would love you like I do
After all the hurt you put me through;
Please don't forget
The way I let
You leave me for a better life.
I went looking for a poem of mine, and was only able to find one from years ago your poems are all deep, but mine… well, just read it
The Banana
Yellow and curved
Like a bright moon at dark
His stem had hardened
Like a tough oak tree’s bark
I peeled off his skin
He looked rather nude
I took a bite of him
Which he thought was quite rude
So I said I was sorry
He said it was fine
I said I was hungry
He said I could dine
So I ate up the rest
And he tasted the best
Sometimes I love my past self
That actually made me laugh so hard I used to write poems about each of my fish (and other pets) when they died they were so cheesy, unlike like this piece of gold
poems are a great way for me to write about emotions that I don't know how to express otherwise. If anyone would like to see some of my poems, I'm happy to share 
!!!
I swear I replied to this but I guess I forgot :kao_cry: love the poem!! Also I would love to do a collective poem sometime
Here's a short little stanza that I came up with yesterday will probably turn in into a bigger poem 
I am nothing if not loyal
I am nothing if not true
I am nothing if I don't believe I meant something to you.
don't know what to call it but that's okay I rhymed Your memory grows faint within my mind
I always find it hard to find the time
To think of you
But when I do
It only makes me cry.
Tried desperately to make you want to stay--
No matter what I did, you found a way
To say goodbye
And let me die
In memories I wish I'd burned.
Only a fool would love you like I do
After all the hurt you put me through;
Please don't forget
The way I let
You leave me for a better life.
The rhyme doesn't feel forced at all - it gives a piece of soft rhythm.
1st verse is a stanza is full of contradiction. It claims the memory is fading 
, yet admits that even fleeting thoughts bring intense emotion
the death in the 2nd stanza here is metaphorical—dying in memories, which are portrayed as prisons . The desire to burn them shows regret, not just over the loss, but maybe over the entire relationship.
Love is irrational, calls themselves a fool, but still feels it.
"Please don’t forget the way I let you leave" is so loaded
ONE of the greatest
How are you able to pick apart my poems so perfectly? absolutely everything you mentioned is true, and it is exactly what I was trying to convey with this poem
(this poem is about/for a girl who follows all the bullies and wouldn't care if I died)
I have patience for your rumors,
We have patience for the doomers,
You have praise for those who stand,
The ones who had the tremors planned.
I am nothing if not doomed,
I am nothing if not plumeting,
From the brisk southern breeze,
That I spent sacrifices earning.
theres a sense of betrayal and isolation ;(
"You have praise for those who stand,
The ones who had the tremors planned."
This verse says as it feels like you're calling her out for admiring the very people who caused harm
"I am nothing if not doomed,
I am nothing if not plumeting,"
The downward motion evoking that emotional fall towards the earth, like you’re spiraling down from something you fought so hard to rise above.
This one hits diff.
Here's a couple verses that I absolutely love but haven't been able to form into a longer poem
The stronger the feeling, the harder it is to walk away;
The stronger the bleeding, the harder it is to numb the pain
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